Homecoming, Part 2

Last week’s entry had a few people asking me for more of the story brewing in my head. Thankfully, this week’s incredible photo prompt gave me just what I needed. Rochelle, I love your eye for photography!

Copyright: Rochelle Wisoff-Fields
Friday Fictioneers – March 21

101 Words

Kelsey woke with a start back in the dilapidated brownstone on Twelfth Street. What was Grant trying to tell her? The vivid dream had left her skin clammy; the taste of cranberries lingered on her tongue.

Dragging herself out of bed for something caffeinated, she padded across her 4th floor studio apartment wondering why this dream disturbed her more than the others – now 10, in as many days.

A knock diverted her from the coffee. “Who’s there?” she asked. No answer. Tying her robe’s sash tightly, she opened the door. Her empty mug exploded when it hit the concrete. “Jim!”

~     ~     ~     ~     ~

If you’d like to participate, clicking on the photo above will transport you to our lovely and talented overseer, Rochelle Wisoff-Fields’ site. Once there, all shall become clear.

Do take a gander at this week’s other entries:

Advertisements

57 thoughts on “Homecoming, Part 2

    1. I actually plan to, Guapo! I’ve never tried my hand at a short fiction story, but this one has grabbed my attention. I have a feeling when I get it to that point these little snippets won’t look quite the same. 😉

      Like

      1. That’s great! I love the feeling when a story starts yelling to be let out.
        (I love it more when I’m capable of properly expressing it, but that’s a totally different conversation.)

        Like

  1. This is a wonderful follow-up. The first part pulls the reader in, with a realistic scene and compelling dreams (nightmares and dreams do have a way of setting a mood!)… when she opens the door and Jim is alive, wow! Nice job, in so few words!

    Like

  2. SO full of rich and satisfying details and you only used one extra word! Amazing. I’d like to know what that cranberry taste was all about (probably for “water-cooler talk” effect). Super good, Judah! I’d like to read more.

    Like

  3. Pingback: Homecoming – Part 4 | Judah First

      1. you don’t need “she asked” after “who’s there?” when we read “who’s there?” we know it’s her, and we know she was asking a question. there’s no way we’d read “who’s there?” and not know it was her and not know she asked a question. that makes “who’s there?” unnecessary. now you’ve knocked off the one word plus one more, and that gives you an extra, important word to add somewhere else.

        Like

Penny for your thoughts?

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in:

WordPress.com Logo

You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. Log Out / Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out / Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out / Change )

Google+ photo

You are commenting using your Google+ account. Log Out / Change )

Connecting to %s